The Mysteries of Devil's Anvil

[CaptainMonkeys]

Well, I haven't really worked on any stories for a while, so here we are.
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Prologue

It was a dark day. The seas were choppier than ever. Mist swirled around the entire ocean, threatening to eat anything it could, to confuse sailors. No ships were brave enough to sail in this water. Whenever people tried to sail in a mist so thick, they get lost. Stranded. Gone. Even the Navy wasn't brave enough to set sail. Nor the EITC. A group of Navy Soldiers were stranded on an uninhabited island, except for one person who resides in a small grotto area. The soldiers were marching to that cave to arrest said person, when all of a sudden, a swirling cloud of mist surrounded the entire island. The soldiers couldn't even see a centimeter in front of them. Glancing around, one soldier saw a shadow in the distance, cutting through the mist. It was a ship. Unlike any ever seen on the seven seas. Soon enough, all the other soldiers noticed this strange ship, cutting through the mist quite easily, as a knife cuts through butter. The horde of soldiers didn't worry because "There is no way the inhabitants of said ship could see said island, supporting said person and said soldiers," said one soldier. The captain of the group of soldiers slapped that soldier for suggesting something so silly. "Only super seeing could see this forsaken island that holds the mysteries that we have heard." As the ship approached, the mist lightened and they could see the ship running aground easier than they cut through the water, rolling right over the sand straight at the soldiers! The soldiers loaded their bayonets and tried to shoot the ship. "Blast! The mist made our gunpowder wet!" yelled one soldier, dropping his bayonet and dashing off into the mist. The other soldiers cowered as well, except for the captain of the search party. "You cowards! Come back here!! If the general finds out, I'll be hung!" he ranted. "Aye, and that be what we want," said a mysterious shadow holding a pistol. He slowly pulled the trigger, pointing it straight as his the captain's heart. It hit dead-on, even though he tried to run away. He fell to his knees, then face-first into the sand. The shadowed figure motioned his hand, pointing at the dead captain and giant scorpions carried the body off to his ship. "Aye, my work here be done...." he muttered as he walked off.


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Hope you liked it! Please leave a comment, and if you see any spelling or grammar mistakes, please let me know! (I'm a perfectionist )

[Dog Firestack]

Very good story, good detail. But I'd like to see more of a surrounding details part. Like there were trees in the distance, islands off in the far directions wherever you looked, the sand was dry, with a hint of gravel in it.

Something similiar like that. It makes the scene more realistic.

[CaptainMonkeys]

@_@ You can't see the islands, there was a mist -.- I put in important details, and this was only the prologue.

[seafox]

I like it....the scorpions doing the heavy lifting is a nice little detail...more please.

[CaptainMonkeys]

Thanks!

Spoiler alert!!

You'll be seeing more of those scorpions.

[CaptainMonkeys]

Chapter One


Grace stumbled out of the cabin of her newly made ship, fresh wood, nails, no rust, and no barnacles anywhere on the ship. The fog had lifted from a few days ago, so she could set sail to Tortuga from Port Royal. She only had a small Light Galleon, so it wasn't too hard to get all the sails up. She was the Governor's daughter, and she had to check in on some of the soldiers stationed on the tree-filled, pirate-ridden island. She scowled at the thought. "Why do I have to do this," she mumbled. "Why can't General Mal do it?" She manned the wheel, as she was the only one on the ship. She got her bearings, then set sail for Tortuga. She headed straight there, not noticing the thick cloud of random mist swirling right in the middle of the ocean.

She was still groggy from sleeping, which is NOT a good time to sail a ship. She sailed right through the cloud of mist, and she felt a bump. Then another. Soon enough, she could see wood splintering at the front of the ship! She tried to turn the wheel, but nothing happened! She ran to the side of the boat, looking down, seeing water. She looked straight ahead. She saw a shadow in the mist. It got closer. She was running aground! In panic, she pulled out a pistol and tried to shoot some rope so she could swing off the ship. She clicked the trigger, then clicked again. Nothing. She looked, and there was no bullet. "Budget cuts," she muttered under her breath." She jumped.

Soon after she jumped, she splashed into the water. She was pulled by the tide onto the shore of the mysterious mist-covered island. She noted that the tide was pulling into the island, not away, so she had no hope of leaving this deserted beach. She wandered around, trying to find a place should could rest during the tide. She found a cave on one side of the island. She went inside, and she gasped.

It was filled with treasure! Gold, gems, other coins, and many other valuables. In one corner, there was an entire stack of pistols. Loaded, she assumed. She waded across the water to the center of the little grotto. There was a small stream running around the center of it. She explored the small grotto, grabbing a handful of treasure, gold dust she guessed, and it ran through her fingers like sand. She was facing the wall, feeling like she was being watched. "Who collected all this treasure?" she wondered aloud.

"I did." Grace spun around quickly, frightened by the sudden speech.

"Wh-who are you?" she asked, frightened.

"That doesn't matter. All I can tell you is this be MY grotto, and I don't take kindly to any person barging in unexpected. Unless.."

"Un-unless wh-what?" Grace interrupted.

"Unless.. ye be a pirate," he replied, a smirk growing on his face.

"I'm no pirate! I am the Port Royal's governor's daughter!" she protested.

"Aye, I see. Well, then I have to kill ye." He pulled a black, shiny, polished pistol from his belt, aimed it, and placed his finger on the trigger.

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I hope you liked it! Chapter Two will be up another time, but first, I need comments!

[Dog Firestack]

Oh god that was scary. :P

GREAT GREAT AND GREAT. Hopefully you'll post tomorrow again. that would be nice :P

[Captain Del]

Very nice, Rose! I liked how you left the readers hanging at the end there.

Just one word for ya: paragraphs. You might wanna break up those big blocks of text in to smaller, more managable paragraphs, so it doesn't look like the story is constantly jumbling around.

[CaptainMonkeys]

Wrong story. Wrong person.

I fixed it, look at it now @_@

[CaptainMonkeys]

Chapter Two

"Aye, I see. Well, then I have to kill ye." He pulled a pistol from his belt, aimed it, and put his finger on the trigger. He slowly pulled the trigger. Grace stood there, petrified. The gun shot, but it was moving slowly. "What be this?! Some kind of black magic!?" the pirate yelled. The bullet was surrounded by a droplet of water, moving with the bullet, slowing it's path. Grace heard something whisper to her:

"Move, quickly!" Grace did as she was told. She stepped out of the path of the bullet, letting it clink against the wall behind her.

"Arrgh!! I don't know what ye did, but you won't be able to do it much longer!!" He pulled out another pistol and shot both at the same time. The bullets flew out, but clinked to the ground even before they could get close to Grace.

"Run...." the voice said to her, in a scratchy spirit voice.

"But..." Grace stuttered. "Who are you?"

"I am but a spirit, now, RUN!" the spirit commanded. Grace refused.

"I will not! I can't leave the island, and the pirate will find me if I do."

The pirate pulled out two tri-barrels. Loading, them he prepared to shoot. "I can only help you once more, and that's it..." the spirit mystified. The pirate was about to pull the triggers, when suddenly both pistols floated from his hand and landed on the floor next to Grace.

"ARG!!!! I don't know WHAT ye be doin', but GET OUT OF MY GROTTO!" the pirate yelled, throwing rocks at Grace. Grace picked up the tri-barrels and pulled the trigger on one. It shot without trouble. She then shot the other. Without trouble.

It must really be the spirit, she thought. She shot them in unison, aiming at the pirate so not to hurt him, but to scare him off. Maybe, if I can scare this pirate out of his home, I can live here until I can repair my ship, and leave... She aimed at his hat, shot, and the hat flew off his head.

"ARR!! That's it!!" the pirate yelled, pulling out all of the pistols he had and flinging them at Grace like rocks. Grace shot each and every one of them flying at her with ease, aiming with precision. Each one exploded in the air. Oddly enough, the shrapnel from the explosion went back towards the pirate, but not towards Grace at all. "Ye be truly a pirate, not a governor's daughter! When word of this gets out, your reputation be ruined!!" the pirate ranted at Grace.

Truly, I must be a pirate, she thought. With one last steam, the pirate stormed out of the grotto, kicking up water as he left. Grace walked around, figuring out ways to rearrange the grotto to make it look like cheese, when a green mist started forming in the center of the cave.

"Hello, Grace..."

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Hope ya liked it, hopefully if you didn't, you'll keep reading. It'll get better! Please, comment

[LizMcmorgan]

very nice!

[James Badwalker]

Nice story! ( I speed read )

[Crestshot]

Wow! I'm really interested in this story now! I like how you're leaving the reader hanging right there. The spirits thing is really interesting too! Haha, and chasing Barbossa out of his grotto was really hilarious.

[KeeperOfTheCode]

This might get interesting. Keep writing. I know I won't. At least for a while.

[CaptainMonkeys]

Originally Posted by Crestshot

Wow! I'm really interested in this story now! I like how you're leaving the reader hanging right there. The spirits thing is really interesting too! Haha, and chasing Barbossa out of his grotto was really hilarious.

....who said it was Barbossa??