The hidden

[Captain Sharktooth]

Good start mate! I would makes the chapters longer, but if you are making a short story, I guess not too long then. Also, you should make a space between each line, just so people can see it better and it comes out neater.

[The Sharpshooter]

Originally Posted by Captain Sharktooth

Good start mate! I would makes the chapters longer, but if you are making a short story, I guess not too long then. Also, you should make a space between each line, just so people can see it better and it comes out neater.

Thanks for the suggestions, but the epilogue is just short for dramatic effect. It'll all be explained toward the middle/end of the story. And thanks for the compliment, I appreciate it cause its my first story.