The legend of the Commodore

[The Commodore]

The former commander of the naval forces in the Caribbean, Commodore Zeke Leyland, had a long and excellent career before being driven out. He entered the Navy's OCS at the age of 16, quite young by anyone's standards. Graudating at the top of his class, he was placed at Fort dundee, thrid in command. Earning the attention of Lord Cutler Beckett after staging the defense of Padres del Fuego during the mining rebellions, he was promoted to Captain of the Guard on Padres del Fuego. And that is only the start...



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Zeke

[Davil]

i think it needs more details for a review(just thinking out loud).

[Dr. Zeppers]

Nice opening paragraph to a story, but not even close to a story in itself. (Do yourself a favor and use a spellchecker also)