The Epic Failers Chapter 1

[Captain Gas]

Before I start this chapter, I'm probably gonna have to post my next chapters in this thread. And, this time PLEASE post your thoughts! Please use CONSTRUCTIVE criticism as I get very sensitive when people say my stories are "terrible" or "awful". And, if you are reading this, I assume you read my prologue of "The Epic Failers"? If not, go to my thread called The Epic Failers to read the prologue. I don't want ye to get confused.

Chapter 1: Escape From The Town!

As Jack and Mark were running out of the town, they still heard sounds of swords clanging and gunshots being fired. Startled by the noises, Jack and Mark picked up their pace and started sprinting towards the town exit.

Before they could make it through the archway leading out of the town, three skeletons appeared in front of the archway, with weapons drawn!

Mark nervously said, "Jack, how do we defeat those skeletons? We have no weapons!" Jack replied, "Hmm... I have an idea!" When he had said that, he had just spotted some dropped weapons on the ground and both him and Mark picked one up.

The skeletons took notice of this and assumed this to be a challenge. They charged at Jack and Mark! When a skeleton was about to swing its sword at him, Jack jumped over it and swung his sword at the skeleton's leg. The swing, thankfully, was successful and disarmed the skeleton's first leg. Now, it was walking slowly towards Jack. This was an advantage to Jack, so he stabbed his sword into the skeleton's chest, and it fell to the ground.

Mark, looking in awe at the dropped skeleton, yelled, "OH, SNAP! THAT SKELETON JUST GOT OWNED!!" Just then, a skeleton swung its sword at Mark, and luckily he parried it with his sword, quickly before it got to him. The skeleton reacted quickly, however, and swung his sword again while Mark was swinging at the skeleton, too! They locked swords, and luckily since Mark was strong, he pushed against the skeleton and quickly stabbed it. It fell to the ground!

There was one skeleton remaining and it was outnumbered. Unfortunately, this one was more of a challenge. It was the captain of the two skeletons and he was swifter, stronger, and more skilled. He chattered to them, "Ye may have defeated me mates, but ye still haven't defeated me. And, I'm far more of a threat." Jack then confidently said, "True, but you've got TWO skilled swordsmen to fight, so you're outnumbered. So, we'll be more than enough to beat you." The skeleton evilly grinned and said, "We'll see about that."

He lunged at Jack, but Jack parried the attack. Unfortunately, since the captain was swifter, he immediately did a slash at Jack and it didn't entirely hit him, but it ripped a part of his shirt sleeve. Jack quickly acted back and stabbed the skeleton. It didn't go down, however, and went after Mark this time! Mark lunged at the skeleton and they locked swords. However, the captain was stronger than the other skeletons, so their strength was evenly matched. None of them gained the upper hand. The captain regretted locking swords with Mark, because he was helpless now, and immediately Jack began to run at the captain and stabbed the skeleton harder this time. The captain finally fell to the ground and wasn't dead, but freed from Jolly's grasp.

The boys' escape was finally secured, and they ran through the archway that would lead to the woods...
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Thoughts anyone? Constructive criticism would be appreciated. As you can see, this chapter was a bit longer, and I'll be working on my chapters to be a little more going towards the story next time. I just thought I shouldn't make Jack and Mark's exit too easy, and added a little action to this chapter. So, comment away! By the way, did I make you anticipate the next chapter with the ending? Don't worry, I'll make it when I can. I won't keep you anticipated for TOO long, hehe.


Anyone? No comments? If not, I'm gonna stop writing stories if you keep thinking every story I make is bad.

[Jackfiresteel]

Short story, nice plot line!