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The Tale Of Tobias (tell me what you think pls:)
the tale of tobias
Tobias Blastcrash was once an ordany swashbuckler. Not the brightest pirate in the Caribbean..., soon found, caught by the navy, and set to be executed. In prison he met Jack Sparrow a famed throughout the seven seas! Jack helped Tobias escape the blasted prison and Toby managed to get away from the island with the help of daring captain Bo Beck where he first met the deadly jolly roger! Thank the waves he was merciful however poor Beck was not so lucky... after swimming for days he landed himself on the island of Port Royal were he met will turner who helped him learn the way of the sword. Through practice and guidance through the mystical Tia Dalma, he slowly became more known and wanted however, he was a loner with few reliable friends and no crew. Soon he grew bored plundering and facing peril by himself.he was losing his will to live… he was on the verge of turning himself in! However, one of his dear friends Nick Seahawk told him of a legendary guild known as the partners N crime. He went in search of this great guild, and after many years, he found its daring and courageous guild master Delmaria Darkskull, known by guild mates Del, and flanked by his good guild mate, Officer Andrew another famed pirate of the seas. all Tobias could do was stare he had found a living legend Del the guild master of the partners N crime! Del told Tobias the basic rules of the guild and the asked he was willing to up hold these rules and be true to the pirate code. Through the help and encouragement of the mighty guild he slowly became more notorious and earned the name Tobias Blastcrash. |
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In the words of me editor, "You don't explain, You show". If you do explain it would be a first-class story. (Sorry for the harsh review)
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....and then he met Potions Pirate. (And who knows what she did to him... muahaha..)
Pretty good, but I kinda have to agree with muffin. Keep working, and you'll be a great author some day!
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Its not Nick Seahawk, its nack!!
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sry my mistake
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Finally! I get credit for being the greatest thing since sliced bread ~_~ LOL!
![]() Nice story Toby, just stories don't belong in our subforum. *Moves thread to The Sailor's Yarn*
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