Well, of course, it would be me who has to disagree....I enjoy the tension between the two, and how you showed, once again, Kats resolve and determination...I can see her thrusting her chin out and climbing up on her soapbox....reforming the Caribbean...heh,,freedom fighters,,loved it..
I agree with Jules bout the transformation of Lawrence...very difficult to create the layers and carry em through...but I know you can.
I think when I try to put my finger on what's off to some is the lack of action,,but if ye were to read them back to back,,,its quite nice...and the drop of action is natural as action caused Lawrences condition which makes the inaction reasonable...ahhhh , i'll hesh now...GJ!
