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Captain Gas 08-13-2011 05:47 PM

Journey of the Last of the Bladebearers Chapter 5
 
Chapter 5: Jolly Roger Returns

"So, mates, I have a plan of our strike on Jolly. Overlook it carefully." Del was excited for another attack on Jolly. Jolly had tried to destroy his large crew called Partners N Crime more than once, so Del would be happy to finally have him off their backs.

Gastro questioned, "Uh, Del, why is there a list that says 'eggs, beef, and crab meat'?" Del took the plans, looked at it, and said, "Oh, hehe, sorry. This was my shopping list for next time I went to the market."

William said, "So, Del, are you sure bombing Jolly's forces will hold them back? I mean, it sounds kind of dangerous..." Del said, "Nonsense! William, if you'd like, we'll have a rum party after this." Will immediately replied, "Ooh, I'm in."

As Jack, Mark, and the group exited the shack, they were greeted by an unpleasant surprise..

"Haha! Ahoy, mateys... didn't think I'd find ye so soon?" The skeletal beast named Jolly Roger cackled.

Gastro said, "Well, I knew you'd attack us, but I thought it would be a little later than when we exited the shack."

Jack said, "It's you again! You're the one who attacked our town!"

Jolly Roger said, "Ah, yes, that pitiful, disgusting town. Listen, boy, I don't care how ye escaped, but I will kill you along with yer other Bladebearer friends!"

Del said, "Don't be too confident, Jolly... we have a strategy!"

Will then exclaimed, "Yeah, and a rum party!"

Jolly Roger said, "Strategy? Whatever strategy you have can't beat me strength."

Gastro confidently replied, "Yeah? Well, you can't beat Gas Power!" Gastro turned around and seemed to be shaking with frustration. Suddenly, a burst of green air erupted from Gastro! It had a stinky smell...

Jolly Roger then said, "Eww. What is that dreadful smell?"

Gastro answered proudly, "Me!"

Jolly Roger then ordered, "Nonetheless, I will destroy you! Mates, charge!"

An army of skeletons charged forward at our heroes, and Del said, "I think it's time for a bit of reinforcements..." Del blew a horn and said, "MATES, GATHER UP! WE HAVE AN EMERGENCY!"

Suddenly, the whole crew of Partners N Crime appeared, including the now mastered Jack Firesteel!

Jack Firesteel said, "Jolly, face the wrath of my newly mastered powers!"

Pirates and skeletons clashed together and finally Gastro exclaimed, "Guys! I think we'll win!"

Another voice said, "So you think..." The black coated man appeared out of a dark hole and said, "Hmph. Weakling insects." The man summoned more shadowy creatures and said, "My minions! Whether it be Jolly's wretched skeletons, or the crew of Partners N Crime, leave no one alive!" The black coated man then disappeared into darkness.

Pirates and skeletons alike fought off the shadowy creatures, and when the crew of Partners N Crime could take it no more, Del said, "Mates, it's time to make our getaway! Jack Firesteel, use your voodoo powers! Gas, use your Gas Grenade!"

Gastro said, "I thought you'd never ask." Gastro got out of his pouch a Gas Grenade, threw it into the ground, and it erupted with green smoke!

And with that, they were gone.

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Well? Was it epic? Tell me your thoughts!

Jackfiresteel 08-13-2011 05:59 PM

Haha I like it!

Captain Del 08-13-2011 06:07 PM

Very good, Gastro! I especially like the part where I am in it :cool:

Just two suggestions:

1. Add more detail to it. Don't let your story lay solely in dialogue.

2. I would suggest making a single thread to post all of your chapters, so you can keep track of them, and you don't end up spamming the story forum.


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